“They say a person needs just three things to be truly happy in this world: someone to love, something to do, and something to hope for.” This is one of the quotes made by Tom Bodett. How can one define his own needs? One’s definition of his needs could be different from another. The different needs of people are due to the different stages of their lives.
One’s definition of the term ‘needs’ changes as one grows.First let’s imagine that our lives have 4 different stages just like the 4 different seasons. The first stage is from our births to 20’s (spring), the second stage is from 30’s to 40’s (summer), the third is from 40’s to 50’s (autumn) and last stage is from 50’s till our deaths (winter). What are the basic elements which plants need in order to grow beautifully during spring? The sunlight, water and air are needed. It is the same goes to our first stage of our lives, what we need are simply air, water, food and warm love from the people surrounding us. These are called the physiological needs, it is the basic yet the most important needs which humans cannot survive without.
Furthermore, as the earth evolves the spring ends and the summer begins. As we know, summer is the hottest season of all four. Many plants might not be able to survive in such a hot weather; nature fire may occur in forests and kill the trees. Thus, nature is kind enough to create different adaptations for them; different plants have different adaptations for the heat, they need it to be able to survive. After the first stage, what needed to be adding on for our needs list are probably the safety needs and a level up of our love life. The safety needs simply refers to our personal and financial security and well-being. At the “summer” stage of our lives, we are more prone to illness, or stress; which leads to poor mentally and physically health. This is where we are more concern on our careers, how to secure our jobs, how to build strong relationships with our lovers and settling down with our own families. These can be very stressful to us which cause harm to our lives in every way. Some of us may not know how to survive due to the lack of our needs; missing the loyal friends, unhealthy lifestyles, unstable careers and the lack financial plans. How can we survive from this burning summer? It can be from the supports of our loved ones, from the determination of exercising regularly or having healthy and good diets each day or mentors to guide us.
Next, the autumn arrives, the temperature is going down. During autumn, the leaves change its colours and the temperature drops. Some animals are more active during this season; they are out to find extra food, storing them as preparation for the arriving winter. The next things we need to add on in this stage of our lives are the esteem. According to Maslow’s hierarchy of needs, there are two versions of esteem; the lower one and the higher one. What we need here most are both of them. We need the respect of others, the attentions, the recognition (the lower version) and the inner strength (the higher version). As we come to the second last stage of our lives, we often ask ourselves what we need to do before our last stages arrive. This leads to our needs of having attentions may it be from our younger generations, friends and mentors and gaining respects of others too. For the needs of our inner strengths, it helps us to take good care of ourselves; loving ourselves more than others. The inner strengths help us to be stronger in every way, such as courage to do something we are long for. As winter arrives, the temperature is getting lower. Winter is the coldest season of the year. In this “winter” stage of our lives, we are back to the basic needs once again. Some may no longer see the importance of having the safety needs or the esteem anymore. They would prefer being care free and live their lives to their fullest before it is too late.
To sum up, the term ‘needs’ to the average person today may be different yet similar at times. Because everyone go through different stages of live and in those stages, we, humans, do need to share the same needs in order to survive.
You took a risky approach. It must have been obvious to you that your thesis statement had no clear main points. But you could get away with it because the main points are strongly implied. You could have specified the main points in your thesis by naming the main stages.
ReplyDeleteHowever, because of the fact that your subsequent topic sentences do not have a distinct focus, the style very quickly became more narrative/sequential in nature. The first content paragraph is still ok, but the subsequent one became increasingly detached from the discussion, especially the part on spring ends and summer beginnings ... this part onwards is hard for the reader to follow.
Overall, while still largely a somewhat focused essay, the organization is somewhat trying for the reader.
Okay. Thank you, cher.
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